Hey David, I broke down the scenes a bit more, i think it makes more sense. Couple of things may not be quite right. I thought he needed a reason for him to smack into the rock so i added the eagle shadow. Let me know if you want me to change anything, i couldnt make out also how the marmot steals the food, so i hope i got that right??
Ext – Deserted Mongolian landscape – Dawn/Morning
Camera pans down from a early morning sky to show a vast sandy desert landscape with large snowed mountains, there is a small wooden hut with a smouldering fire outside in the distance.
A Mongolian man (mongol) has prepared his food placing his plate on a wooden log.
The Man looks really hungry and happy that he is about to eat his food. Meanwhile a Marmot jumps out of a bush and towards the Mongolian man.
The Marmot jumps on the back of the Mongolian mans head and runs away with the food.
The Mongolian Man is very upset and Angry.
EXT- Mongolian Landscape
The Mongolian man chases the Marmot across a vast distance over a hill. We can see here how far away the Marmot is from the Mongolian Man as he pants behind.
The Marmot Dodges round a giant rock.
An eagles shadow is cast on the ground in front of the Mongolian Man, causing the Mongolian to look up and therefore doesn’t see the rock he then smacks into.
The Mongolian is in a lot of pain and rolls around on the floor.
Ext – Deserted Mongolian landscape – Morning
The Mongolian man chases the marmot further.
The Marmot jumps over a broken down Cart without any problems.
The Mongolian man crashes into the Cart sending debris flying.
The Mongolian man Appears from the dust and debris, attached to two of the Cart’s wheels where he is struggling to stay on them.
The Mongolian flies past getting closer and closer to the Marmot.
Ext –Forest - Morning
They enter into a forest full of trees, its quite dark with angel rays shooting through.
The Mongolian makes a jump for the marmot and the wheels fly off.
The Mongolian is inches from the marmot when an Eagle swoops in and picks up the Marmot.
The Man is by himself, looking up at the eagle taking his food away.
The Mongol looks to the floor and sees a big leaf that looks like a feather.
Ext –Outside of Forest - Morning
The Mongolian Man is set and ready to jump off the cliff with leaves and Twigs attached to each of his arms to look like Wings.